second draft

the idea for this second draft was to create more of the home video effect, and making it seen as if the boy was behind the camera filming her, that is why i have a lot of shots were she is staring at the camera longingly and breaking the 4th wall. i think this makes my music video more interactive with the audience as she is giving them eye contact throughout the music video but is also makes the viewer feel and empathise with her pain as the eye contact makes the audience feel close and connected.
In the second draft of my music video i have added some performance and some instrumental parts onto the video. i have also shortened the music video so its around 3:03 i have done this because i didnt want the music video to drag on and become boring. please could you comment and tell me what you would change and what you like about it. thanx